Toned.

I don't know if my title is a word but there you have it. Toned. I am toned. Oh...I guess it is a word. Anyway, when it comes to perfecting the voice and tone of any paper I write, I can fall into the "much too sarcastic" gap of writers. That being said, I have been extra careful about the tone of my paper. I am trying to be persuasive so I can't just be bland and neutral and all Switzerland like. I have to have some umph but it is directing that umph where I get a little messy. It is an academic essay so formality is key and I feel like my topic helps me along with that due to the fact that it is scientific, family related and health related all at once. That doesn't leave too much room for sarcasm but I promise, anywhere I did happen to find room I took full on advantage of. I've revised and redirected my introduction by changing the first sentence from "Americans are fat" to something a little less offensive...big thanks to all of you in class who critiqued that in the beginning. All in all I am tone-comfortable, organization-comfortable and research-comfortable. Yay for me.